1275 CEThe Yangtze River Valley is very useful and rich. It is also one of the major rivers in China. Emperor Khan only wanted land and the valley so he spent several years trying to get control and he has. After he defeated the Song Dynasty the Chinese people would not go into Mongol rule.
The Southern Song Dynasty had control of the river valley and the Mongols took interest in the specific valley. The only problem was that the Southern Song Dynasty was in the way. The Mongols surrounded the Song thus caused the Song to flee away and surrender. The Mongols won over a forfeit. Not many Chinese people were happy of the fact that Mongols now have full control of China.
“I think us Chinese people are in trouble now that the Mongols are in control because that just puts us lower on the system of hierarchy,” complained Xian-Zoe. Many other local Chinese in the south have agreed with Xian-Zoe and many people fret that they’ll also have to pay heavier taxes than anyone else. “I choose not to listen to these barbarians. This is our country and they have no right to just come over here and make themselves at home while torturing us natives that never invited these poorly mannered Mongols here,” stated Jiang-Wu.
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ReplyDeleteYou have a lot of good information in here, but you need to make it more of a story. You need to lead with the WHAT, the exciting, breaking news event. Right now you start with a description of Khan (Kublai Kahn, Emperor of China is a Mongol who created the Yuan Dynasty and is currently living in Karakorum) that makes it sound as if he created the Yuan dynasty a long time ago, when really your headline is that the Mongols have just taken down the Song Dynasty. Your conventions (punctuation, spelling, capitalization, grammar) are good.
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